Q. 영어 글 이정도면 괜찮을까요? 어색한지 확인 부탁드립니다.
안녕하세요. 신필욱 전문가입니다.아래와 같이 조금 자연스럽게 고쳐보았습니다.. 꼭 정답이 정해져있는 것은 아니니 참고해서 자신만의 더 좋은 방향으로 글을 쓰는데 유용하게 활용하시면 되겠습니다...Were it be possible to modify the school regulations, I shall allow students to wear private clothes and to use their celluar phones on the campus in a responsible manner. The reasons why I prefer private clothes are becauae the uniform pants tend to make my legs look way too short and the fabrics work not well for a sweating issue, and finally they shrink easily after washing. Also I often like to ponder the way I can express my own fashion style in the school, thus a flexible dress code would be a better option. For the celluar phone issue, it is necessary as blind spots where lack a CCTV device make it hard to capture evidences in case school violence occurs. Under these new changed provisions, students would feel more comfortable expressing their own individual characters and could stay in a safer and fairer way.